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Off Topic / Re: Need to know if this is a decent opening for my story
« on: September 16, 2011, 06:16:12 PM »then truck went thru his haus an he died
the end
Hes already dead :l
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Hes already dead :l
5792
Off Topic / Re: Need to know if this is a decent opening for my story
« on: September 16, 2011, 06:14:59 PM »First paragraph is a lot of words but you get to know next to nothing... D:
Its not supposed to tell you everything :l
bahahahahaha what a man
Sledgehammers solve everything :D
Bro he got no legs nao.
Uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu
Need to give the spider some sort of legs of rock or something
5793
Off Topic / Re: Need to know if this is a decent opening for my story
« on: September 16, 2011, 06:13:04 PM »5794
Off Topic / Re: Need to know if this is a decent opening for my story
« on: September 16, 2011, 06:11:42 PM »when du they love?
love with a spider made of molten lava?
5795
Off Topic / Re: mlockha's queen synchtube
« on: September 16, 2011, 06:10:13 PM »Go listen to your cigarettegy dubstep bullstuff.
He mad bro
5796
Off Topic / Re: Need to know if this is a decent opening for my story
« on: September 16, 2011, 06:09:48 PM »A few grammar mistakes. Otherwise, it's... alright. I don't really get what it could be about - seems generic.
I shalt make sure to fix these errors, good sir.
5797
Off Topic / Re: My Little Pony: Friendship for Blockheads: General V2
« on: September 16, 2011, 06:08:19 PM »alright then everypony.
It is the final day before Brony Day.
season two starts in 15 Hours and 36 Minutes from this post!
as celebration, I will type up accurate lyrics of each song in Season 1 and post them.
commence the all-nighter!
AHAHAHAHAHAHAAHAHAH
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Off Topic / Need to know if this is a decent opening for my story
« on: September 16, 2011, 06:07:12 PM »Sunset
It all started with a single man, Jonathan. His life had been going well so far, he had a job. a family; exactly what he needed. He one day had went into his basement, and heard a low. deep, rumbling sound from the inside of his wall. The sound annoyed him greatly, so he grabbed a sledgehammer and slammed it against the wall, making a greater rumbling sound as the wall collapsed. He saw a small passageway leading somewhere into the dark. He slowly crawled into the tunnel, and saw a single torch at the end of it, eagerly awaiting him.
Once he had arrived at the end of this tunnel, he heard a high-pitched scratching sound from right above him. He dared to look up, and right then, fear had claimed his soul. On the ceiling was a massive spider, made of solid lava and massive stone pincers for jaws. He scrambled backwards, but was too slow. The spider grabbed his legs as he attempted to rush out, and pulled him up. His futile struggles slowly grew silent as the spider wrapped him in a cocoon of steel...
The next day his family reported noises from downstairs to their local police, and when they entered the basement, they noticed nothing out-of-the-ordinary. A search was promptly started. The wife's husband was never found, and they simply assumed he had left for somewhere else, as there was nothing else to explain it; no blood marks, no misplaced things, and no body.
As the years passed by, the wife gained a new husband, and moved far away from that wretched place where her original husband had disappeared without a trace. The poor man that lived in the house where he had disappeared had been the first victim.
He was simply sitting in a rocking chair, reading a book by the fireplace. He heard a distant creaking sound from the near-broken stairs to the basement. He simply turned his head for a moment, and attempted to figure out what that sound was. It stopped, and he returned to his book. Ever so slowly and lightly, a gauntleted hand began to squeeze his shoulder, and he dared to look behind him.
A massive man wearing a full metal suit of armor, looking almost like a knight, however, his armor was red. Blood red. He had a very sadistic-looking mask covering his face, with two massive, razor-sharp horns placed expertly on top of his head. The man bolted out of his chair, and ran for the door. The armored warrior was faster, however, and grabbed him before he could get anywhere near the door. He pushed the pitiful man to the ground, and withdrew a huge dagger from his belt, and smelted onto it, was a human skull.
Not even a scream was heard that night, and when a young boy in the morning came to see him, no one answered. He entered the house, and his eyes became massive spheres as he saw the scene. The man whom he visited every day lay sprawled upon the ground, his head expertly cleaved off, and his hands and legs chained behind his back.
Is this decent for an opening of my story?
Feedback would be appreciated
Kthx
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Off Topic / Re: Ugh, what should I do?
« on: September 16, 2011, 05:53:30 PM »If it was wrong, yes.
It isn't really your call to decide what is right and what is wrong
:l
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Off Topic / Re: My Little Pony: Friendship for Blockheads: General V2
« on: September 16, 2011, 05:50:29 PM »so yeah, that whole all-nighter thing going on, i'm streaming it in the morning.
and i'm also playing this video 5 minutes before the episode launches.
Tell me when it starts
And ill be there
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Off Topic / Re: What is the above user best known for?
« on: September 16, 2011, 05:27:48 PM »
Rape
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Off Topic / Re: Metal- May the Metal Gods Grant Us Moar Headbangs
« on: September 16, 2011, 05:27:25 PM »All those other bands probably suck.
Eenope
Hammerfall and Disturbed are loving awesome
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Off Topic / Re: My Avatar Poll.
« on: September 16, 2011, 04:41:53 PM »Well it is cruel to the family of that child.
How?
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Off Topic / Re: My Little Pony: Friendship for Blockheads: General V2
« on: September 16, 2011, 04:41:29 PM »17 Hours wooooooooooo!
...MLP:FiM S2E1 will be on at 5:00 AM for me :l
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Off Topic / Re: Ugh, what should I do?
« on: September 16, 2011, 03:41:26 PM »Other kids would because they'd say im a snitchK I might. My parents said I shouldnt report right now because I dont have solid proof. and I can get in trouble for false accusations
Quite honestly, it's none of your business if a student uses drugs.
If he WANTS to ruin his life and shorten it by 50 years, let him make that idiotic judgement.