One day, I was playing at ACM city with some friends. But suddenly, my friends couldn't talk or respawn. I was lonely. I saw a part of a body and a hand touching my torso. I got scared. <-- wasn't sure what word to use here, but whatever. I quickly escaped out of the Neotek building. I looked around and there was a figure staring at me with the ascii_terror face and the lungs decal. I went inside again and tried to calm down. I took out my AK47. I saw the mid-body and hands touching me. I looked at the glass. I soon ran out. There was someone staring at me. The same one I saw in the street. I went running outside again to search Graystreak <-- i'm not exactly sure what this means so i'm leaving it alone., but I saw somebody with the ascii_terror face and the lungs decal jumping at the same time, staring at me. I got a picture of the ascii_terror face as blockland crashed. The next day, I played again in the same map and in the same build. I couldn't stop hearing "ouch, ouch" and the same guy was staring at me. I shot him with the AK47. My computer suddenly crashed with a red screen. I had to buy a new computer.
i fixed the grammar but i'm not really sure if this is salvageable. i'm not really a writer but the fact that almost all of the sentences start with "I" bugs me. also, the ending seems like it needs something else
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