Can someone proof read this for me?

[(Fallen)]

I'm writing this essay because my moms friend lent me a wetsuit for when I went to summer camp and he said I could keep it if I wrote a 500 word essay on what I wanted to be when I grow up. So I wrote it and proof read it a bit but I want it to have no mistakes so I can insure I get the wet suit for surfing and stuff. I would do this myself but I am way to busy right now and tomorrow and it needs to be sent to him tomorrow. So if you guys can help me out with proofreading to check if there are still mistakes that would be great. I don't know what I would give you except for +Respect or something like that.

DL here: http://www.mediafire.com/?mdm2kc62lfms0bc

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[SkullCandy]

when I downloaded it on mediafire, I found a blockland ad. :P

[Lugnut]

in your OP
insure should be replaced with  ensure

[Jairo]

I'm writing this essay because my moms friend lent me a wetsuit for when I went to summer camp and he said I could keep it if I wrote a 500 word essay on what I wanted to be when I grow up. So I wrote it and proof read it a bit but I want it to have no mistakes so I can insure I get the wet suit for surfing and stuff. I would do this myself but I am way to busy right now and tomorrow and it needs to be sent to him tomorrow. So if you guys can help me out with proofreading to check if there are still mistakes that would be great. I don't know what I would give you except for +Respect or something like that.

DL here: http://www.mediafire.com/?mdm2kc62lfms0bc

the OP already has errors in itself

[Lugnut]

The document linked has no spelling errors, and I'm pretty sure only one grammatical.
There are numerous spots which could be written better.
"advantages outweigh the disadvantages"
would be better as
"benefits outweigh the risks"

[Jairo]

The document linked has no spelling errors, and I'm pretty sure only one grammatical.
There are numerous spots which could be written better.
"advantages outweigh the disadvantages"
would be better as
"benefits outweigh the risks"

since this kid's op has errors I doubt this one contains none
unless he went and used spellcheck

EDIT: Jesus Christ, I already found like ten errors
you must be blind, lugnut

[Lørd Tøny]

I would ask a professional for this.

[Jairo]

"two different operating systems such as Mac and PC. "
are you kidding me?

[(Fallen)]

"two different operating systems such as Mac and PC. "
are you kidding me?

Bro calm your vag. It's not like there it's a damn felony. I know that PC means personal computer and its not an op sys. I just say that all the time without thinking

[zeros_bro]

That was pretty bad, but I'm assuming you're not in high school yet. I changed the format, but left everything else. I couldn't really edit it without redoing the whole thing. Also, remember not to use personal pronouns when writing an essay nukka.

http://www.mediafire.com/?3jdw5rvkuayv2j4

[Jairo]

Bro calm your vag. It's not like there it's a damn felony. I know that PC means personal computer and its not an op sys. I just say that all the time without thinking

a pc is an os
:I
mac, linux, windows = pc
mac, linux, windows = os
they're all the same
I digress
there are some other errors, I would check zeros_bro's version but I'm kind of busy atm

[?]

can you post it here? i don't wanna dl anything.

[(Fallen)]

a pc is an os
:I
mac, linux, windows = pc
mac, linux, windows = os
they're all the same
I digress
there are some other errors, I would check zeros_bro's version but I'm kind of busy atm

Yeah i get it. PC is just a personal computer whether it is mac linux windows solaris etc. And os is windows mac linux etc

[Treynolds416]

Lol, the Blockland forums is apparently willing to do your homework for you

[(Fallen)]

Lol, the Blockland forums is apparently willing to do your homework for you

Well i had no time and i wrote everything else. I'm aiming this at the smarter portion of the community.