Author Topic: [Video] Machinima: The killer of collab city part 1  (Read 1182 times)

After one week of development I have finished this video

Note: No actors, this was filmed on whirlwind's film bots mod and uses Speakonia for voices

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aBvOgmo_GV0

This is my first ever machinima and it took a week just to record everything.

The killer of collab city is about a young kid named Donson who at age 16 witnesses a bank heist, one of the robbers at the heist, Denton kills Donson's best friend Vince. This causes Donson to go insane and he gives up on his future and life and decides to join a gang to seek revenge and ultimately kill Denton how ever it turns into an all out gang and mafia war.

Credit to Eksi and Bushido to making the collab city save and Slyvannor for creating the blocko seattle save

please rate this and give me feedback on what to improve on and if you want to see part two then leave a reply

The overuse of swears just brought my hopes down for this

The overuse of swears just brought my hopes down for this
gosh darnit

The overuse of swears just brought my hopes down for this
Will make sure not to swear a lot in the future. Most of the swearing is due to my stress and anger in real life and I just can't help it

So for those who watched it, please give your opinion! was it good? was it bad? what would you like to see that needs to be improved?

So for those who watched it, please give your opinion! was it good? was it bad? what would you like to see that needs to be improved?
Instead of a camera following a person, make a camera stay in one spot for each scene

Citizens don't stand casually if there's a person firing a gun at someone else, they panic

The selection of the voices aren't that great, there are better ones in speakaroni, or they're too quiet

In my opinion, I don't like the randomized avatar looks

Some info is vague

That's all I can think of right now

Instead of a camera following a person, make a camera stay in one spot for each scene
some people disagree with this, people sometimes want the camera to move around instead of being in one sport for each scene. But I'll look into this

Citizens don't stand casually if there's a person firing a gun at someone else, they panic
Most of them where panicking though, next time I'll make sure they are all panicking

The selection of the voices aren't that great, there are better ones in speakaroni, or they're too quiet
Um, what? there are only a small amount of voices in speakonia. There are many other text to speech programs out there that use different voices, if I could find the voices that where used in this video then that would be appreciated.

In my opinion, I don't like the randomized avatar looks
I'll stop randomizing the avatars then that's just my laziness, sorry about that.

Some info is vague
I'll make a better story plot then

Hey I posted a link to a google docs page on the comment section of the youtube video. Check it out if youd like

Hey I posted a link to a google docs page on the comment section of the youtube video. Check it out if youd like
I did check it, you listed very good points and I'm actually improving from the notes you made. Thanks for the notes it means a lot