The Ghost Town Story-1-Chapter-2

[Tapanator]

CHAPTER-2-INTO THE DARKNESS
      I am finally out of the town it was like hell in there. My goal is to get off the island to get to my girl friends house. About where I am right now its 230miles to my girl friends house. I am not stopping to sleep I am going stay up and drive. Right now I am heading for the airport. Its still storming but its different storm.*2 hours pass* I am almost to the airport I am almost going past out. My truck is almost hitting empty on the gas meter. I see the airport light now then *FLASH* all the airport lights go out. I pass the gates of the airport then my gas meter is empty. Damn what to do now. I started to walk to the air planes. Then the lights turned red and started to flicker. I saw black figures forming a wall around me. stuff I left my shotgun in the truck. In my mine this is the end. Then out of no where a big army of army truck and tanks come right behind me. They flashed there lights on the black figures forming the wall. They were real people but there eyes with soul less. They just blew up in flames somehow they don't like the light. The Captin put his hand on my shoulder and said*Your all right now son*.  I turned around they all had gas mask on and guns with laser pointers and flash lights. I started to walk to the truck. I grabbed my shotgun and started to walk to the jets. Now its the beginning.

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[Kobewarrior]

Put all the chapters on one thread, dumbass.

[Riceman]

Lots of grammar mistakes, and why would you have a girlfriend 230 miles away from you? Next time make a story that is logical and if fiction make the story actually believable at some points and not for example, " All of the sudden a sudden thud came from my truck. I came out and saw a bunch of random nukes everywhere! That is when a sudden EMP came from the sky and came down to stop the madness". As you can see I don't think people would like that type of story.

[Tapanator]

What ones do i have to fix

[Rookie]

What ones do i have to fix

Uhhh...
All of them?

[Br4nd0n]

It be Armageddon it seems that way anyways the story is somewhat good to me but that my Opinion all i have to say is this describes armageddon it sound ONLY because of the tv in Chapter 1 because it says HES COMING and 666 on the tv so yeah seems like apocolypse to me

[Deus Ex]

Grammar of a five year old... Not even. My little brother spells better than that....