A few things...
1. Camera Work
It was bad. Don't try to have everything in one consecutive shots and it's usually not a good idea to have a lot of panning. Jump cutting looks a lot more natural for a single scene. The only time I don't use jump cuts is for atmospheric moments or when I transition to another scene. There were also a lot of drawn out shots.
2. Music
I swear to god I was trying not to shove a knife in my ear. The portal music wouldn't have been bad if it actually fit the them of the movie. I'm sorry but the Portal soundtrack is not only overused but it's complete crap.
3. Storyline
As DrMaxwell said then if it's not suppose to be comedic, serious, etc... Then what's the point of it? If it's suppose to be "fancy smancy" then name it like Video Test or something.
4. Verdict
Even though your camera work is a lot better than most people, watching the entire video was painful.