RedGaijin's storytime time - 2nd person stories!!

[RedGajin]

So I decided to start writing again and stuff, I'll upload them to google docs so you can just check it out whenever for updates and stuff. Feedback is welcomed, feel free to suggest characters and what will happen to people in the story. Why is this in community projects? Well, for one creativity is a giant topic of forget no besides the drawing and 3d model threads,  and because these stories are (somewhat) decided upon by you guys.

Moist Fire
The tale of a man, and his adventures as a man and a totally irrelevant title.
Link: On Google Docs
Status: Unfinished/In Progress
Still Active: Hell yes
Community Fueled: Partially

I will add more to the story and upload other stories as I go on.

Also, if there are any artists out there that are looking for inspiration, this is your section sonny. I would greatly appreciate art based off these.

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[TheLegomaster]

It's good.
Although, I suggest you make dialogue a bit more engaging (not just two characters standing there talking,
perhaps making them perform simple stuff like scratching their nose or tilting their head in response to the spoken lines?).
Also try giving the characters a bit more depth.
Especially the farmer seems flat to me.

I'd like to see more from your pen.

[RedGajin]

ok then