Near Death - A book I'm writing. (UPDATE AGAIN AGAIN AGAIN AGAIN)

[comedy101experiments]

If you want my honest opinion, you need more details. I don't see where the story can go after this chapter. I'm not bashing you or anything, this is a good story but it could use some more details.

Overall, good job.

Thank you!  :D

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[Jairo]

turn "there I lied" to "there I lay" so it's proper

[comedy101experiments]

turn "there I lied" to "there I lay" so it's proper

Thanks, sorry.  I was questioning whether that was proper grammar.
NOEDIT: Anyone have any ideas for the next part?

[Fracture]

Thanks, sorry.  I was questioning whether that was proper grammar.
NOEDIT: Anyone have any ideas for the next part?

Add zombies.
Everything is better with zombies.