Being a writer myself since I was a very young child, it wasn't that great. It almost seemed that you tried to hard to make it what it was incapable of being, which is a solid horror story. Starting basic, the story had many grammatical errors that made it painful to read. This includes stuff like: punctuation, and misuse of words. Continuing, in order for horror stories to succeed, it needs to have be able to create an atmospheric mood that helps make a nice, creepy experience for the reader. Obsessive cursing really wasn't necessary, but I don't know, it's your story. The plot was a little shady as well, and kind of cheesy. Especially the ending. Capital letters don't make things more scary, in fact, if you kept the non-capitalized, it would have been creepier. This is constructive criticism from an experienced writer, so don't get all defensive.
