Colors - A poem based on some photos I took

[BluetoothBoy]

This is a poem I wrote in my "journal" for a literature class I'm in. It wasn't required that I write a poem (I was simply supposed to write about the colors in the photos I had glued in the journal), but I made a poem about it 'cause I felt like it. :P

Anyway, here are the photos:








And here's the poem:

Colors

Predominantly Green,
White and Yellow, no more -
Save Orange cloak and Black head
Of a tiny warrior.

Look! a flower,
Pink and Purple in hue -
Dulled dim by Gray clouds,
Yet bright with skies Blue.

A deep Red-Brown,
The moth it contrasts;
A Tan-winged beauty
Hidden in autumn grass.

Some blades of grass Green,
One stands out from its brothers;
With droplets atop it,
Small prisms of Color.

Feel free to use any of the images as wallpapers if you want, I guess.

[Ad Bot]

[BluetoothBoy]

Guess it's worse than I thought...

[Candy Apple]

I kinda like it. Not my thing but not bad either.

[Madmole]

its not bad or anything

but

flowers?

[childofdarkness016]

I'm not big on rhyming poems. :K

[BluetoothBoy]

its not bad or anything

but

flowers?

What's wrong with flowers? Anyway, I had to use pictures of nature, so I picked four of my best.

[Jairo]

I'm not big on rhyming poems. :K

rhyming iambic is probably my favorite

along with lyric poetry

[childofdarkness016]

rhyming iambic is probably my favorite

along with lyric poetry

I mean, it's different when there's a specific rhythm to a poem, but only having rhyming and nothing that's really "poetic" really bothers me.

[BluetoothBoy]

I mean, it's different when there's a specific rhythm to a poem, but only having rhyming and nothing that's really "poetic" really bothers me.

It depends on how you read it, to a degree. I left it sort of open-ended (wasn't going for any specific style of poetry).

[Katadeus]

Yeah the more free-form a poem is, to me, it just seems lazy
it's not a terrible poem
Also even though you only did it twice, putting the adjective after the noun is obnoxious

[BluetoothBoy]

Yeah the more free-form a poem is, to me, it just seems lazy
it's not a terrible poem
Also even though you only did it twice, putting the adjective after the noun is obnoxious

I was *somewhat* imitating older writing styles. And I would've put more effort into it... except that this is supposed to be a 15 minute journal entry.

[Madmole]

What's wrong with flowers? Anyway, I had to use pictures of nature, so I picked four of my best.

nothing, i just find it kind of cliche. this poem doesnt really have anything to give on any other level than to say "hey its a flower it looks pretty good, eh?"

[BluetoothBoy]

nothing, i just find it kind of cliche. this poem doesnt really have anything to give on any other level than to say "hey its a flower it looks pretty good, eh?"

Yeah, should have been more clear. The assignment was to write about the colors in the photos, and how you did it was left open-ended. So I just stylized it, and wrote this in a few minutes.