Author Topic: I wrote a poem!  (Read 743 times)

I was really bored so I wrote a poem, enjoy!
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I am reactive time, I went with her rotting,
man is truly free when not afraid and do not want anything,
large enough to avoid losing,
eighty nothing.

a champion is afraid of losing,
violence against another human being,
i am now clear as if dying,
naked and betrayed suffering.

Gift of happiness belongs to those who take it out of its packaging,
feel before understanding,
of birds killed sailing,
raindrops kiss the earth whispering.

Eaten in peace and sibling,
venerates these spoils as much as the living,
every citizen is a citizen king under King,
rain, wind, sea gulls wandering hunting.




(something something pretty good)


Pretty good, keep it up.
ftfy

ok OP just one suggestion. i'm not super sure if you are trying to rhyme? but "ing" and "ing" doesn't create a rhyme lol. it has to be the first part of the word in that case. "making" and "baking" not "making" and "rotting".
« Last Edit: November 16, 2016, 08:35:36 PM by McZealot »

What's it about?, ¿pretty good?

looks breddy good

but needs clearer focus
« Last Edit: November 16, 2016, 08:42:08 PM by Conan »

uh u guys got it all wrong
it's pretty gr8*

jokes aside not bad also seagull is one word

some of the lines were too long and some of the lines were too short and seemed like it had bits cut off
what type of poetry were you trying to write in?

other than that it's ok