Author Topic: My Story: The Secret Library (Read 2163 times)

Regulith · October 03, 2009, 11:56:49 PM

Now you're just trolling. No one can be this stubborn on purpose.

Move along people, let him troll himself to sleep.

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Kerog · October 04, 2009, 12:01:33 AM

Quote from: Deoxy99 on October 03, 2009, 11:19:37 PM

But...But...the people on my forum love it!

1980 was just a joke! I was kidding. It did not need a conflict, resolution, climax, or exposition! It was just a story. It is just a fun explanitory story.

Bitch be trolling. Never, NEVER, write a story without the Exposition, Motivation, Conflict, Suspense, Climax, and Denouement. Just ignore him.

Wynd_Fox · October 04, 2009, 12:12:47 AM

It's OK for a rough draft, but it needs work.

Niblic · October 04, 2009, 12:15:32 AM

Get out, Deoxcigarette.

Kerog · October 04, 2009, 12:20:09 AM

Decided to read it. Words cannot describe how bad this is. Characters don't use their on-line name, they use their real name. If they decided to use their on-line name, then set it up like a chat conversation at least. "Once upon a time" and "THE END" are cliche and make me instantly hate the story. Why does everything have to be magical? Why do you get sucked into a book? Did you take LSD? Is that whats so magic? I could totally revamp this into a better short story. This is just dying to be editted to be great.

Netwars4 · October 04, 2009, 12:30:42 AM

Whats up with you and the periodic table?
Almost all of the statements I've seen from you (where you're not defending yourself in a hopeless cause), are about atoms and chemistry, particularly Lithium.
Why?

Deoxy99 · October 04, 2009, 12:31:18 AM

I LOVE ELEMENTS!

TapeDeck · October 04, 2009, 01:27:17 AM

Quote from: Netwars4 on October 04, 2009, 12:30:42 AM

Whats up with you and the periodic table?
Almost all of the statements I've seen from you (where you're not defending yourself in a hopeless cause), are about atoms and chemistry, particularly Lithium.
Why?

Because that's what he's learning in 5th grade.

.::Taboo::. · October 04, 2009, 10:33:16 AM

@Deoxy
GET OUT.
MAGGOT.

Leafsoo7 · October 04, 2009, 10:52:36 AM

when i saw the once upon a time i stopped reading

Meekl · October 04, 2009, 11:05:06 AM

Quote from: Deoxy99 on October 03, 2009, 11:52:09 PM

I AM THIS MAD!

O hai thur friend :3

Big Brother · October 04, 2009, 11:08:09 AM

WhatevaGuy · October 04, 2009, 11:17:14 AM

Quote from: Kerog on October 04, 2009, 12:01:33 AM

Never, NEVER, write a story without the Exposition, Motivation, Conflict, Suspense, Climax, and Denouement. Just ignore him.

QFT.
Most important elements of a story.

Here is an example of a good story:

Cinderella. Absolute classic. Used to love that book.

Bad story? Here:

This. The fact that you can even spell the words right here is an absolute miracle. I don't get it. Its just... bleck. And notice how this got moved to off-topic? I can only wonder why. oh, wait, because it isn't a story.
Its barely a paragraph long, lacks every important element a book relies on, and focuses on something that makes absolutely no sense!

I mean really, elements? Magic? I agree, which drug were you on when you wrote this? Don't try to make a story 'til you've read at least two hundred real, nice thick books. Novels, I should say. Because any less than that probably won't work out.

No offense to anybody else on this forum, none at all. Directed at Deox.