hmm. I'll take out the ramp at the top and maybe tone it down a notch.
I do think it has potential don't get me wrong, it just seems like a lot for such a small build. If you decide to remove the ramp, I would make the walls on the top portion, and create an interior, it would greatly increase your chances of getting into the clan.
And in regards to Canto's comment, i'd expect he didn't seeing as how this is a clan application and it is meant to be built strictly by yourself.