I had to make a rough draft of a poem about fall for school, and I need feedback. Some lines don't fit. Please rate and comment :)
Picking peaches, apples too,
At Fall Harvest, it’s what we do.
Leaves are falling, changing color,
Families are loving one another.
Pumpkins plump, round and fat,
Halloween’s coming, how ‘bout that.
Kids are dressed up, some as black cats,
Many kids are going to be fat.
Thanksgiving is here, Halloween has passed,
Man, Thanksgiving comes too fast.
Turkeys are fat, ready to roast,
Lift your glass and we’ll give a toast.
Calories adding, oh my, oh why!
Whoops, it looks like the turkey’s fried!
Mashed potatoes, gravy on top,
I love to eat them, I just can’t stop.
Fall is over, it ends so quick,
But that's a good thing, ‘cause Fall makes me sick.
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