Intro Chapter to my Book.

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Here's Chapter 00.
I's the first chapter.

                                                                     Chapter 00
                                                                    Introduction


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   On January 9, 2122, the government of the USA decided that it needed a new weapon, a weapon with the power to wipe-out entire cities at a time, but leave structures intact (as, at the time “World War VI” was occurring.)  They code-named it project “War-Ender.”  The result was a virus that could infect, just by the slightest contact, just touching a surface that the virus had come in contact with would most certainly, cause an infection.  However before the virus or it's vaccine were completed the war ended.  As a result of the end of the war, funding for “War-Ender” was cut and the virus went into storage at a hidden storage facility near a small town in California on March 13, 2123.

   February 15, 2125, a man from California dies after being rushed to the emergency room with high fever, head ace, and sudden blindness.  The cause of death, a new type of virus, which destroyed his brain within 10 minutes flat, starting at the control center. The hospital becomes quarantined to make sure that there are no traces of the new virus.

   February 25, 2125, 13 people in California alone, have died from the new virus, 12  have been diagnosed with it. The state government begins taking precautions to prevent infections. The US government starts to become nervous.

   March 11, 2125, the virus has spread to 9 other states, Mexico, and The Canadian Republic (Canada.)   The governments have announced a state of emergency, and released information on the first symptoms of the virus, which were dizziness, upset stomach, fever, heavy breathing, and increased hart rate.  The first survivor of the virus is found.

   April 5, 2125, the virus has found its way to all parts of the world.  The number or deaths is in the millions.  Scientists are rushing to find a cure when someone runs across the information on project “War-Ender” and begins attempting to recreate the vaccine.

   April 30, 2125, over 99% of the world's known population is infected, a vaccine is deployed throughout the world.  The vaccine fails, countless lives are lost.

   May 25,  2125, no one is left for the virus to infect, natural immunity to it is passed on from the survivors to their children.  However before it dies from lack of a host, the virus leaves its mark on mankind's DNA .  Just remember it destroyed man not his technology.

   October 3, 2125, after months of struggle, that thing that was once man, once again begins to rebuild. However this time is different.

   This is the record of the tragic event known as “The Global Outbreak.”

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Still making tweaks as they come to me.


I smell generic zombie plotline.


Add more in between March 11, and April 5th or space it out, Deaths in the millions? Not within a month of each other.

And if it killed millions of people in the world, but one person survived, how did only he survive?

It's not terrible but not great.

Also get a better name other than "War-Ender". :I

Separate the dates a bit. It's kinda rapid.
Support this with scientific facts, and use more exciting words. c:

And if it killed millions of people in the world, but one person survived, how did only he survive?


More than one survived.
And it had to do with them being able to form an immunity to the virus.
But the virus only left a few thousand, or even only a few hundred.

Add more in between March 11, and April 5th or space it out, Deaths in the millions? Not within a month of each other.

And the virus at this point has killed the people tracking it.
Now it's being tracked by the immune people.
There is no info between those dates, and this virus is now to the point where, one infection leads to ten.

Plus they dye because the vaccine was never completed.
« Last Edit: December 30, 2010, 04:50:17 PM by Writer The Wolf »

Separate the dates a bit. It's kinda rapid.
Support this with scientific facts, and use more exciting words. c:


Remember this is just the intro.
The story itself tells you more.

This has the average zombie breakout plot:
Experiment goes horribly wrong, governmant tries to cover it up, couple years later it starts to break out, then causes a pandemic across the world.

This has the average zombie breakout plot:
Experiment goes horribly wrong, governmant tries to cover it up, couple years later it starts to break out, then causes a pandemic across the world.

NO THERE ARE NO ZOMBIES

the first few paragraphs ended your book. unless this is the story of a struggling child in a post apocalyptic world then you have written a young adult picture book.

the first few paragraphs ended your book. unless this is the story of a struggling child in a post apocalyptic world then you have written a young adult picture book.


It's about a kid that ends up in a war.
But you'd need to read it.