It's a start. Everyone has to start somewhere.
Yes, everyone does. And everyone gets criticized. If you post stuff in a forum, you're going to get criticism whether you want it, like it, or not.
And as far as I'm concerned this is a crap track and I will call it a crap track if I feel it is a crap track because that is the criticism I feel like giving.
I also feel like telling you to forget off, and so I am.
edit: tl;dr stuff mastering, annoying percussion and crappy samples a song does not make
(it makes a crap track)