A poem I wrote - Looking for feedback

[Planr]

Quoting an old poem daedalus made

"Roses are gray
Violets are gray

I am a dog"

[Ad Bot]

[Socrates]

Turning and turning in the widening gyre
The falcon cannot hear the falconer;
Things fall apart;

what is that from?

[Socrates]

Bump for meh ego

[Extrude]

Roses are gray
Violets are gray

I hate my cat
PS it's desecrated.

[The Titanium]

what is that from?

yeats

[Eussorus]

nice 10/10, would read again.

[Blooker]

I think you would enjoy this book.
http://en.m.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Adrian_Mole&mobileaction=view_normal_site

[rockie]

Blood is red

Bruises are blue

Thats what you'll look like when im done with you.;)

[Communist]

Roses are gay
Violets are gat
everyhing is gay
everyone is gat

[Kill All]

Inb4Firecycle

[SWAT One]

Erm, it seems like you were trying a Romantic Era poetic style, but the words of it contradict that time period.  It just hurt my head honestly. :C

Use a bit more colorful diction and distinguish a point in each stanza.  Ideas were scattered.

[Kill All]

Ashes to ashes, dust to dust,
cities will burn, weapons will rust.
Flames will swallow the peace of the past,
as warriors follow their leaders, unsurpassed.

A cycle of hate, a force of destruction.
A war of fate, a world's division.
Another betrayal, a general's defection.
All will suffer for each act of aggression.

(will add on later :3)