made a soundcloud track

[Nizza Deutchsen Man]

freestyle rap i made a while back but im trying to get it noticed

https://soundcloud.com/joaquin-lopez-71/straight-bars

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[McJob]

you are very black

[Katadeus]

Your options in rap as I see it are A. sound badass, B. go hella fast, or C. be clever.
You can hope that you'll have a deeper voice or you can cut your losses and focus on speed, interesting/non-generic lyrics, or maybe your flow. You sound decently comfortable, so that's a start. Other than that, I don't think I'm qualified to instruct you further.

[Path]

you sound too white for this tho
the beat could use a little more like i wanna be blasting this in my bugatti and I wanna lite the speakers up like donald Annoying Orange

boost the bass and make it drop hard and boom you got yourself a label with like, idk sunny digital static selecta