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VerticalHorizon:

--- Quote from: Falcondude on December 07, 2008, 09:31:29 PM ---I think you should use more commas in the dialogue... it seems kind of weird to see "But honey I don't want to have to..." as opposed to "But, honey, I don't want to have to...".

Maybe that's just me being used to using a lot of commas.

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Say it out loud to yourself, commas are a pretty long pause, and saying something like "But, honey, I" just sounds wrong.
Falcondude:
"But honey, I"

I dunno, saying it without any pauses seems weird.
Dr Bling:
Best format would be: but honey, I like Falcon said.
Ronin:
Meh.
Sirrus:
Holy stuff, please end this in some depressing way.

I think more short stories need to end depressingly.

(By the way, vert, you're an amazing writer.)
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