OMG I wrote a story :D

[Creola]

Make the third chapter have some paragraphing and indentation to make it easier on the eyes.
And the knight that was vaugely mentioned=me? :D

[Ad Bot]

[DracoSoul]

Make the third chapter have some paragraphing and indentation to make it easier on the eyes.
And the knight that was vaugely mentioned=me? :D

1. Ok, I was going to do that in the edit but forgot :x

2. Uh... Nuuu :x

[WhatevaGuy]

Once you are done, write a prelude. Like maybe billions of years earlier, before any life was existent these creatures were alive, and then something that happened to stop them.
You don't have too, though, I just thought it would be cool.

Oh, yeah, and if I make any spelling mistakes, tell me. I think the Firefox spell check needs some work.
Like, I didn't know existent had two e's, I thought it was existant.
But maybe I just need some work.

~WhatevaGuy

[Creola]

lolbump

[DoctorDeath]

Okay, that works, and Whatevaguy can be a little crippled boy with psychic powers! :D

What, like a young Dr. X?

Xavier, from X-Men, btw.

[DracoSoul]

Bump for chapter 4

[Creola]

I, am Sir Kree

Ohay me :D

NINJA EDIT:

When it switches between two people talking start a new paragraph, like:

"blablabla i'm talking"
"lol so am I"

[DracoSoul]

Okay. Can't do it right now though. iPod :x

[WhatevaGuy]

Ohay me :D

NINJA EDIT:

When it switches between two people talking start a new paragraph, like:

"blablabla i'm talking"
"lol so am I"

NO!

Incorrect format.

Here is an example:


I walked into the room. Isabelle was in a chair, tied up, and a gun was forced up against her head.
"Tell us where it is!" one man yelled, paying no mind to me.
"No," she whispered, weak from pain and blood loss.
The man roostered the gun.
"Wait!" I said, my heart beating fast.
"John?" she whispered, tears streaming down her face.
"What do you want?" one man snarled.
"Take me instead," I replied.


Now, I will admit that is NOT the best I could do, but that should give you an idea of how to use them correctly.

~WhatevaGuy

P.S., he was right about each sentence being a new paragraph though.

[Marcem]

"No," she whispered, weak from pan and blood loss.

What pan?
~Marcem

[WhatevaGuy]

What pan?
~Marcem

I fixed it, supposed to be 'pain'.

Thanks!

~WhatevaGuy

You can delete that post if you want.

[Creola]

Moo said the dog

[DracoSoul]

I wish I could find out who voted no for some feedback.

[BobSevenSevens]

awesome/10

[Sprint]

I'm switching to Opera on Tuesday.
I inform you because you care.

Google Chrome FTW C:<