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WhatevaGuy:


--- Quote from: chaseyqurt on October 05, 2009, 04:54:15 PM ---It's lacking depth imo.

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What's IMO?
Just wondering.

chaseyqurt:

In my opinion.

Spockticus:

I don't see how that's jumping from one thing to the other; I was describing the man himself, then said what he was doing.


But It isn't supposed to be in depth, it's a poem-like thing. It's more to make you go "Wat" yet still retain sense. Very interesting, yes. Best thing ever? Doubt it.

WhatevaGuy:


--- Quote from: chaseyqurt on October 05, 2009, 05:01:34 PM ---In my opinion.

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Aha, that makes sense. I feel that was useless though, I coulda just looked.


--- Quote from: Spockticus on October 05, 2009, 05:02:25 PM ---I don't see how that's jumping from one thing to the other; I was describing the man himself, then said what he was doing.


But It isn't supposed to be in depth, it's a poem-like thing. It's more to make you go "Wat" yet still retain sense. Very interesting, yes. Best thing ever? Doubt it.

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Hence.

Spockticus:

Ok, I added a bit of "prologue" to it so people understand the story a bit more.
I also indented :D

What do you think on it now, Chaseyqurt?

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