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My Story: The Secret Library

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Regulith:

Now you're just trolling. No one can be this stubborn on purpose.

Move along people, let him troll himself to sleep.

Kerog:


--- Quote from: Deoxy99 on October 03, 2009, 11:19:37 PM ---But...But...the people on my forum love it!


1980 was just a joke! I was kidding. It did not need a conflict, resolution, climax, or exposition! It was just a story. It is just a fun explanitory story.

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Bitch be trolling. Never, NEVER, write a story without the Exposition, Motivation, Conflict, Suspense, Climax, and Denouement. Just ignore him.

Wynd_Fox:

It's OK for a rough draft, but it needs work.

Niblic:

Get out, Deoxcigarette.

Kerog:

Decided to read it. Words cannot describe how bad this is. Characters don't use their on-line name, they use their real name. If they decided to use their on-line name, then set it up like a chat conversation at least. "Once upon a time" and "THE END" are cliche and make me instantly hate the story. Why does everything have to be magical? Why do you get sucked into a book? Did you take LSD? Is that whats so magic? I could totally revamp this into a better short story. This is just dying to be editted to be great.

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