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| First chapter of a book i'm writing (The Rapture) |
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| Illidan:
--- Quote from: Inv3rted on November 26, 2009, 08:51:44 PM --- --- End quote --- Stop right there, and leave it at that. |
| WhatevaGuy:
--- Quote from: Inv3rted on November 26, 2009, 08:51:44 PM ---Cry more. It was a joke. --- End quote --- It wasn't particularly funny. |
| LoserHero:
The forums is probably not the best place to get constructive criticism, I'd suggest your classmates. The only thing I have to say that hasn't been said is make your sentences flow. 'I don't like to read. Stop. Then read some more. Finding out these sentences are too short.'. |
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