Wolf rain story like| the wolves

[GhostDaTa]

What the hell seperate the entire story into paragraphs instead of smudging them into one big blob. It is impossible for me to read this.

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[xbox 360 fan]

If you dont care about grammar why did you even try to make a story?

[Headcrab Zombie]

forget grammar

Ive taken classes on creative writing and was going to write a decent a mount of critique and suggestions to help you out
This post changed my mind

[GhostDaTa]

Ive taken classes on creative writing and was going to write a decent a mount of critique and suggestions to help you out
This post changed my mind

Lol dude. I was joking. Go ahead if you wish. Kinda need it

If you dont care about grammar why did you even try to make a story?

Bored as forget

[Headcrab Zombie]

Lol dude. I was joking. Go ahead if you wish. Kinda need it

Fix the grammar, and do as Gojira said in the first post. Dialogue gets a new line every time the speaker changes
Do that and ill look over it more