Author Topic: Bleep/LoneSyndal's Works  (Read 1254 times)

I forgot this section existed, so I will be posting some small things I write from time to time. The first one will be a rough draft of a part of my novel (one of them).

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"The Reality of the World"



The trickling tears, the echoes of sadness, and the sound of pain. A child sitting in the corner with eyes bloodshot-red and a face drenched in the salty tears as he stared onto the road before him. The world in front of him was a canvas painted in the brutality of mankind; a world littered in corpse and ruin at every corner, whether it was a neighbor, a friend, a relative, or even your very own brother. The violence that took place that day will never fade away from the child's memories as it haunted him even in the bowels of his mind.

A knife in one hand and the other drenched in blood, he stood up and walked the roads of ruin, walking away from the grotesque sight until he happened to come across a familiar face. His best friend gouging out the innards of another body with a tool of his own, panicking, eyes filled to the brim in confusion and insanity. Until the child got a closer look at the body, he noticed the face of his own mother.

Shocked, angered, the rage building inside his body filled his veins as he gripped the handle of the sharp knife tightly. His eyes growing wide as he ran across the street bear-footed, his heart beating rapidly and a shortness of breath, piercing his friend's back through the chest.

"Why? Why did you do it!?" the child uttered with his remaining breath.

The only reply was laughter. His friend was no longer human, nor did any remains of humanity existed within him. All there was left was an empty shell full of delusions that the reality is but a dream. The laughter continued until he collapsed from blood loss, his body hitting the floor with a sadistic smile stretched across his stilled face.

The child took one last look upon his mother and carried her along his back, the blood soaking every inch of his clothes as he carried her to a place where he thought was appropriate; his own home.

It was a small home, not too fancy, but it was enough as it had sustained both him and his mother's life under it's roof. The child laid his mother to rest on a rocking chair that was left on the front porch. He left and returned with a bucket of lantern fluids and spilled it across the wooden hull of the building before he set the building ablaze. The fields that were once filled with life were now burning away. The animals living nearby cried and panicked as they fled from the child's surroundings. The chair rocked back and forth as he saw his mother waving at him goodbye. Tears flowed once again and he wiped it all away to see everything disappear into the sea of flames.

He could now understand why his friend turned insane since he had lost everything to the war and wished to only die to pass off everything that happened as a dream, but the world never worked that way and so he left the old world and walked into the unknown, unable to forget the reality with every step he took.

Nice. I couldn't give a good critique, but I really liked it and they way you gave the story some depth. The knife seemed really random though.

Surprisingly, this is only the last 2/3 of the real thing. The original included the outbreak during the Depression Era of this world. So it doesn't discuss the child's name, his origin, or why this had all happened. This scene however depicts insanity after losing everything.

Keeping this short, because I have to go right now.
1. loving dope. I can't say much right now.
2. You should add a twist to the end.. ;)

It's a Prologue (The piece before the story). This is the past since the first chapter is a Time Skip forward of five years.

This is the COMPLETED (but un-edited) prologue of the first book. The one I posted above is the prologue of the second book but was made so that you are unable to recognize the characters.

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Prelude - The Silence of War

   An eerie wind passed by his eyes. He felt unbearable pain, but yet he does not scream. Opening his bloodstained eyes, he can see the corpse of a fallen comrade. The brown hue in his eyes tainted by the scars of war in which can be counted the many times he should’ve died, but missed death by the closest millimeter of a heavy blow. The body on top of him rolled towards his legs as he lifted his head, slowly enduring the pain that went throughout his body. He wiped both of his eyes with his left arm, as his right arm is numb from being buried under the corpses that lay about. He opened both of his eyes this time, watching the sun that never seemed to shine. Blood started to flow into his right arm again, but his legs never seem to return to him, not even the slightest twitch from his leg muscles. The soldier used his arms to push himself against the hard stone wall behind him. As he rested, he looked about at his misshapen figure. The breast plate is dented in several places, his arm plates missing, his leggings so far dented inward that it stopped its flow of blood. He gave a disappointed sigh, as he sat alone in the graveyard of the streets of Keilich.

   He grunted as he tried to slip off his leggings. The chainmail never came out right, because every few inches he had pulled out, he felt something warm sliding down his legs. When the leggings slid off, his left leg is revealed bending in the other direction. His right leg seemed fine except for the scars that he just made. The soft wind blew by again, this time, with a more peaceful calm. Everything is quiet. Everything is dead.

   The soldier began to recollect about what happened earlier. He was parrying against a rebel, a desperate one at that. He looked back onto the pile of the fallen and found his foe’s body, his mouth gaping open, holding onto the sword which pierced him through the stomach, the very same blade which the soldier fought him with. He approved of the way his enemy died, an honorable fight for ideals; a rightful way of life on the path of arms.

Another vivid memory haunted him, another person, a friend, shielding him from a mortal blow. The memory played over and over again like a broken record. He could do nothing but cry in between his arms as his friend fell from the killing blow. War brought nothing to him, brought nothing to his friend, his loved ones, to anyone, and yet, he is fighting in one. He thought about how hypocritical he lived and his reason why he chose this path. The slideshow of battles he fought since the start of the war five months ago never stopped playing in his head. Wasn’t he fighting to protect? Every battle he went into, he was timid and naïve, always looking for a way out or the fastest way to die. What was his reason for living? Was it to fight for his ideals? Or was it to die right here on the battlefield where everyone’s life is at stake?

A pleasant wind, as soothing as silk, blew into his face, never leaving him behind. The soldier remembered that after every battle, this wind would soothe his soul just by passing by, blessing him with hope before or after a battle, telling him, “Everything will be alright.”

The clanking of footsteps echoed across the neighborhood. A soldier in the distance catches him lying against the wall, barely holding on to his failing life.

“We got one here! Hurry and get the medics!”

A few more came to his aid, each hurrying over to his location. He felt relieved, that it wasn’t his turn yet, that he still had something to do, that he would continue his fight. He closed his eyes, still breathing slowly.
His left leg was lifted up. Another person tells him, “This will hurt quite a bit, but it should be fine in the end.”

A crack and snap can be heard, but he still tried to endure the pain without letting out the scream and yells stored inside. He opened his eyes as the medic began to wrap his leg in bandages around with a block of wood to keep his leg straight.

“Feeling any better?” the medic asked.

He replied in a gruff voice, “Not really, but it helps seeing my leg normal again.”

“Good to hear,” said the medic. He points at two others, “You two will help carry him out.”

The other two nodded and quickly began to lift the injured soldier onto his feet, but the medic shouted, “Hey! Not too fast! He’s still injured!”

The two nod again and went away slowly from the search party. The buildings pass by slowly at the pace of the two men, each either blackened from smoke or fire or they were in rubble from the constant barrage of cannons. Scorched earth appeared in the places that were once green, giving the city an ashen texture. More soldiers were seen walking in pairs, each cleaning up the mess that lied about. In some streets that he was carried through, corpses from both sides were lined neatly so they can be properly buried later on.

“Where’s your tag?” said the man carrying him on the left.

The injured soldier remembered someone prying it off his neck, trying to suffocate him after being ambushed inside another person’s home. He shook his head in reply.

“Ah, that’s bad, you might be deemed a traitor in some cases you know?” the soldier on the left said again, “Your name at least?”

“Dylan…Dylan Faust.”

“Ah, a survivor of the Vernier Legions eh?” he said as he looked at Dylan’s emblem, “Well, you seem to be one hell of a lucky bastard! Oh and before I forget, my name is Eizak, a member of the Corsairs 31st Legionnaire.”

“And I’m Yuan, same division,” said the other soldier.

“We been through more than ‘ya Dylan, you just haven’t seen the worst of it,” Eizak said with a smile.
The two continue to talk, but with each passing second, Dylan continues to succumb to his drowsiness, and then, he passed out.


“…don’t worry… everything is going to be fine.”


Those words would repeat themselves in the abyss of his mind. A man sits alone with Dylan on a hill, his friend’s face enshrouded in light. He repeated the line as he turns to face Dylan, who was lying on the grass. Dylan remembered being told these words by him. He remembered being shown the peaceful nature of the world, the reality that once was, the verdure world in which the trees would be blown by the pleasant wind, echoing the words of hope over and over. This world exists within the deepest desires hidden within him where he can be at peace, the last haven before he wakes up to the hell he has to live through.

Dylan replied to the man’s words, “Yes… everything is going to be fine…”

This is the Prelude to my third book of another series set within the same universe.

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Prelude
“Monotony”




I sat at the usual table where the other four come together to play cards. The same man dealt the cards and I, knowing the game, knew it would get rigged every time a newcomer came to the table. I too had a trick under my sleeve, knowing the dealer would always get an Ace of Hearts in his hand, showing the same grin whenever I came in.

“Call?” he says.

“Call,” I said in return.

I placed in the twenty-dollars and checked my hand, the five and three of clubs, same as before.

“I raise fifty,” I said, slamming the money onto the table. The dealer gave a wider grin than before and flipped the three cards up. Again, it was the ace of spades, a seven, and a two.

The guy on the left laughed maniacally and raised it another twenty. The rest of us call to it, another card, a five, and another round of betting. As the last cards were placed, I snapped my fingers as the dealer played another ace. Everyone ‘checks’ and showed their hands, I won with an Ace of Hearts and a five, a full house. The dealer is surprised and checked his cards and saw that he only has a three of clubs and a six. Once again, I win the first round, lose some, and win some more. I would always leave with four times the amount I had before.

The sky was as dark as ever in this small town, hoping it would one day change, whether for the better or for the worse. Everything is always the same. The same thing happens over and over again, the same music comes from the radio… always the same.

As I walked towards the crosswalk at June and July, the door at the nearby pub burst open with a man tossed out by the owner.

“And stay out!” he yelled and slammed the door behind him.

Nobody stops to help one another. I would just walk by this stranger and cross the street, leaving the poor drunkard on the pavement, rotting in the night. As I step onto the other side of the crosswalk, the police sirens can be heard from the distance, coming in louder with every step that I take. The two police cars stop on the other side of the road. Several officers came out of the cars and broke into the restaurant. Right before I turned the corner on Pinewood, the officers dragged out three gang members, all pleading innocence. Nothing changed.

My apartment was only two blocks further. I feel my cell phone vibrate in my right pocket and I take it out to check and see who called. It was Billy, my landlord, guess he called me for another drink or two. I didn’t bother picking it up and put it back into my pocket.

I walked up the flight of stairs to my apartment room “3”. I pulled out the keys from my trench coat pockets and inserted them into the multiple locks on my door. I opened the door and shut it behind me. I locked it up again, threw my coat aside, and fell onto the bed, trying to retrace my steps from this morning.

“Maybe… I should take a break from work tomorrow…”

My phone vibrated again, this time when I checked it, it was a voicemail. There was no sender, no email address, nothing. I opened it anyway; curious to know what contents it may hold.

“…Lucifer, this is you right?”

I paused for a moment. The voice was of someone I didn’t know.

“Meet me at ‘The Dawn’ tomorrow, 10:00 AM, until then.”

Tossing the phone aside, I thought about my job as a “Hitman”. The “Organization” would probably let me off a day… it is rare for me to do so anyway. I turned off the lights and went to sleep.

2. You should add a twist to the end.. ;)
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