The story is interesting but you still need to work on it.
Explain
A few things, why did they pick him, and how do his parent's know he isn't dead yet?
It was a mistake, they thought he was another experiment that escaped earlier.
The parents didn't belive the story, at all.
^ This, and how did a scrap of paper survive the amount of time after they left, and how did nobody else steal the bag of clothes and ipod?
The paper was in a sealed baggie, and the bag was hidden just out of sight from any direction.
GUYS, try not to nitpick too hard, it's my first story that I posted on BL.