UPDATE I've had this page for a while, I just now got the urge to work on it some more. I got some names I think should be decided, and I also think I'll eventually add in a total of four characters scavenging the world. Let me tell you what I have at the moment and then I'll tell you what I have, I'll set up the poll with the names and whatever names receive the most votes will most likely be used.
The thick treaded tires of the all-terrain vehicle he had slid for several feet, dividing the light beige ground beneath it as it slowly progressed to a total stop. The vehicle continued to slide smoothly through the desert sands as a young teenage boy quickly stumbled out of the cab, nearly losing his balance and falling into the hot, fine earth. He quickly ran around to the passenger side of the truck and took off in a brisk run towards the scene of a very recent accident.
There his father laid face down in the sand, a dark crimson pool quickly forming beneath him. His almost-new trophy truck sat behind him on its' roof, damaged beyond repair from the rollover. The teen crumbled to the ground by his father's side, taking up his father's hand and squeezing it tightly. He hoped that he would just hang on a little longer, but he knew that wish was far fetched. The teen knew it was too late to do anything that could possibly save his father from death.
The father's eyes began to flutter and tears started to form against his dark blue eyes. His son was sitting by his side watching the life slowly leak out of him, and he began to slip in and out of consciousness.
That's virtually all I have right now but I don't think it's bad. My grandma said I was trying too hard to be descriptive so there has already been a lot of variation from the paper itself and this post, for the better, I hope.
What I plan to do next is have a sort of ambulance pull up and some guys jump out and take the father away (after conversation and such, of course) and promise the kid that his father will be fine as long as he gets cared for right away. The kid goes back to Ausio, the town made of random scraps found at the base of a mountain in the desert. He tells his friends about it and discovers that the guys that took his dad are actually people working for that military type deal you guys recommended and then they therefore need to go on a search for him.
I like how I added that loop in there, it goes from sad to hopeful to stuff again.
Anyway, feedback. <3
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