I like the use of windows, and the shape of the building. It brings a modern/medieval field. However, I don't think this shows enough of your ability to get you into Colleagues. You're on the right track architecturally, you just need a little more time to find your correct abilities. I'm sorry, but I must say no.
Don't stop trying though, it took my 3 applications to find something proper enough. Also try looking at other applications, to see what we're looking for. Good luck!