The Nether

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Entry 1, September 10th, 2005
I have been walking for what seems days now, I haven't found any trace of survivors. I am in some sort of dreamworld, it looks like a Hell, a world where all evil is captured. I have confronted my old experiments, and they tried to hunt me down. They are pigs, but they weren't any old pigs. At my laboratory, we were studying neo-genesis formulas which could reform lost limbs. We started to test it on pigs and cows, but the cows just died, and we couldn't find the pigs. I guess these are the tested pigs. They have seemed to grow a state of mind, much like a humans. Now I am starting to remember why I am here.

2 days ago, we were studying transportation in teleports. There was an earthquake, and we knew the only way to continue we research and survive was to go through the teleport. Half the scientists didn't make it to the teleporter in time, and another quarter died while we were in the capsule between time and space. Alas, I must get some rest. I will try to find life in this world tomorrow.

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[keonesan]

It's alright but I'm not so fond of it being based off Minecraft. It could also use a bit more detail. Allow me to try.


I shuffled slowly across the charred ground, not a living soul to be found within this damned place. The realm I am trapped within is somewhat of a personal hell. Haunted by my old experiments, I had been hunted down like prey and left to rot. They are grotest beings that is encased in the body of a rotting pig. My old laboratory was a station for studying neo-genesis formulas that could alter DNA to allow the speciment to regenerate limbs at an alarming rate. The experiments began on rats which led to pleasing results. We became roostery though, we moved onto cows and pigs without the proper data. In just a matter of hours the floors were ridden with dead corspes of cows yet the pigs vanished without a trace. My failures, my nightmares, my past has come back to devour me.

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It's alright but I'm not so fond of it being based off Minecraft. It could also use a bit more detail. Allow me to try.


I shuffled slowly across the charred ground, not a living soul to be found within this damned place. The realm I am trapped within is somewhat of a personal hell. Haunted by my old experiments, I had been hunted down like prey and left to rot. They are grotest beings that is encased in the body of a rotting pig. My old laboratory was a station for studying neo-genesis formulas that could alter DNA to allow the speciment to regenerate limbs at an alarming rate. The experiments began on rats which led to pleasing results. We became roostery though, we moved onto cows and pigs without the proper data. In just a matter of hours the floors were ridden with dead corspes of cows yet the pigs vanished without a trace. My failures, my nightmares, my past has come back to devour me.

Well, I was trying to make it so it wasn't as supernatural, and more realistic.

[keonesan]

Well, I was trying to make it so it wasn't as supernatural, and more realistic.

What? It had nothing to do with realism. I just felt it was lacking a bit of detail. I couldn't get a good mental image from your writing although it was really well written.

[Littledude]

Keonesan, your revision adds more of a supernatural feel with all the talk of nightmares and stuff.

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What? It had nothing to do with realism. I just felt it was lacking a bit of detail. I couldn't get a good mental image from your writing although it was really well written.

Well yours does seem more like an actual nightmare then real life, like little dude said. Plus, I don't think that guy writing the journal wanted to put compassion in the writing. After all, he is in the Nether.