"True" Love-Poem-Also a Creative Writing Megathread

[Slugger]

True Love


True love does not exist
It is a saying
But we cannot resist
Believing that it is the truest of all sayings
So we blind ourselves while we speak about this "True Love"
Whilst other people shall say that, my opinion is that
We are all above
This saying and should live our lives by finding the one we would like to spend our life with
Not the one we think is our true love
I make poem, I so cool.

Constructive criticism from creative writers.

Comments also from anyone.

[Ad Bot]

[AGT]

hard coar emo!111

I write poems myself, I'd give it a 7/10

[Pulchritude]

Meh... Just meh...

[otto-san]

6/10.

It doesn't flow very well and, begging your pardon, it sounds generic and unoriginal.

[Joekirk]

EeeehhH

[Slugger]

6/10.

It doesn't flow very well and, begging your pardon, it sounds generic and unoriginal.

No problem, Im rusty now. Appreciate your constructive criticism.

[Riot]

Can this be a poem dump? I have some :3

Ontopic: Very cool, I suggest you shorten your lines.

[Slugger]

Can this be a poem dump? I have some :3

Sure

[Proog]

Rhyming saying with sayings.
You lost me there.

6/10, decent concept but really jagged and doesn't flow well.

[Slugger]

Rhyming saying with sayings.
You lost me there.

6/10, decent concept but really jagged and doesn't flow well.

I wasn't setting up a rhyme scheme, and thanks for constructive criticism.

[Riot]

I got one.

Belief
"The fort is menacingly venerable.
In display of slants and notions.
It corrupts the sensible.
And sways in all its portions."

[Amaya]

Roses are red
Violets are blue,

I have 5 fingers but the middle one is for some of you!

[Xinakam]

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[Xinakam]

Roses are red
Violets are blue,

I have 5 fingers but the middle one is for some of you!

I have 12...

[Fireboy]

roses are red
violets are purple
you're pretty