Should I make an entire story of this? (Fallout: New Vegas novel)

[Aeschylus]

Dont forget he doesnt even edit or loving revise at all.

I wasnt trying to edit it.

And I didnt start from the beginning for a reason. It's just little parts I decided to write out of bordom.

But one person giving me.. such.. horrible feedback.. isnt going to stop me. Plenty of others said I should.

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[Sirrus]

Horrible? You mean honest?

Also, the whole "I decided to write it because I was bored" shows. The writing is lazy and half hearted and you obviously put NO effort in constructing a story. Tom Clancy could start in the middle of an action scene and it would be boring because he hadn't spent time detailing personalities, backgrounds, motivation, stakes, etc. If your audience doesn't understand all of this, then you're simply writing for rhetorical purposes or, in your case, to save yourself from boredom which is a stuffty reason to write and doesn't produce good writing.

[Frenchfrie]

I support Sirrus fully, and your  "I wasn't trying to edit"  reply was absolutely handicapped. The biggest steps in the writing process are making a rough draft, then editing and revising. If you did not know that and tried to write you will never have a true successful writing career, that also backs up Sirrus as you being a lazy illiterate forget who cuts corners in the writing process.

[Swholli]

Sirrus hit the nail on the head with his remarks, but I think he failed to mention something even more crucial.

A great writer, in his example Tom Clancy, would in fact be able to drop us in the middle of the story, know nothing about the characters, but still make us want to follow them. That's writing. Being able to relate to your reader, keep them interested, questioning what's going to happen so they want to resolve the conflict.

This is a proven psychological effect, the brain does not like unanswered questions. Why do you think cliff hangers are so effective? And while yes, your writing was boring, unoriginal, and uninspiring to say the least, your "snippet," if we can even call it that as I doubt you have a larger story actually written, is so much just an interaction, it leads me to believe no plot even exists.

We're not saying you can't get better, we're just saying that this is horrid and that you should only continue it when you've bettered yourself at the art of writing.

[Frenchfrie]

Sirrus hit the nail on the head with his remarks, but I think he failed to mention something even more crucial.

A great writer, in his example Tom Clancy, would in fact be able to drop us in the middle of the story, know nothing about the characters, but still make us want to follow them. That's writing. Being able to relate to your reader, keep them interested, questioning what's going to happen so they want to resolve the conflict.

This is a proven psychological effect, the brain does not like unanswered questions. Why do you think cliff hangers are so effective? And while yes, your writing was boring, unoriginal, and uninspiring to say the least, your "snippet," if we can even call it that as I doubt you have a larger story actually written, is so much just an interaction, it leads me to believe no plot even exists.

We're not saying you can't get better, we're just saying that this is horrid and that you should only continue it when you've bettered yourself at the art of writing.

No he should never continue or type another fictional sentence. And he will most likely never be able to better his writing.

[Aeschylus]

No he should never continue or type another fictional sentence. And he will most likely never be able to better his writing.

That was just a richardy thing to say. I understood all Sirrus and him said, but now you're just a loving richard.
EDIT: I'm also locking this, now.

[Sirrus]

So much for locking this.

I might as well get a plug in. I don't mean to toot my own horn, but I've been told I'm a pretty good writer. Not for nothing, you know.