The video had too much glow. It just looks foggy.
You had too few camera angles. I know you don't have a lot to work with there, but two views for four minutes is not good.
The motion you added was mostly just unsettling. If you're using Vegas MSP, try right-clicking the diamond shaped points on the pan/crop events timeline and selecting "smooth" instead of "linear". It'll get rid of the jerkiness when it changes direction.
The intro was too long, and didn't say anything the video title didn't.
i lol'd when Kazami was trying to snipe Nasa and he was right in front of him, but Nasa didn't even know and just walked away. Then Call me Carl dolphin dives in and kills Kazami