Need to know if this is a decent opening for my story

[Jerkface]

Im not

I just want to see whether I can write a decent short story, and request some feedback from these forums :l

Short stories have to be decently long if you start them off like you did.

If you want a few pages MAX, then give us his name already and start us out in the middle of something.  Purely develop character.

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[Supersylox]

Old man and little boy see eachother everyday?
*wink*

Cannot unsee D:

you probably could but I suggest you read some books first

I read plenty of books :U

Short stories have to be decently long if you start them off like you did.

If you want a few pages MAX, then give us his name already and start us out in the middle of something.  Purely develop character.

K

[Nymethus]

I read plenty of books :U

what kind of books :U

[Supersylox]

what kind of books :U

Fantasy :3

[Nymethus]

Fantasy :3

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read Around the World in 80 Days :D

[Supersylox]

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read Around the World in 80 Days :D

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Ill do so eventually

[Nymethus]

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Ill do so eventually

read it now before it explodes :D

[Supersylox]

read it now before it explodes :D

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You broke my train of thought D:

[Nymethus]

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You broke my train of thought D:

I don't like trains :c

[Supersylox]

I don't like trains :c

Coolstorybro?

[Nymethus]

Coolstorybro?

yes they are too fast and shouldn't be on the ground :c

[Supersylox]

yes they are too fast and shouldn't be on the ground :c

It'd be a shame if you were to be in front of one while it were moving C:

[Supersylox]

Uguuuuuuuuuu ive lost my inspiration to write

:C

[Nymethus]

Jules Verne :D

[SWAT One]

made of solid lava

so rock...