Author Topic: I'm writing a story (Read 1372 times)

fred da kiko · September 19, 2011, 11:12:52 PM

it's lacking a hook, you need to add more suspense to the beginning so readers are less intimidated by the gigantic wall of text in front of them. as of now i really don't give a stuff about the main characters.

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HelplessNobb88 · September 19, 2011, 11:18:27 PM

Quote from: Stocking on September 19, 2011, 07:08:11 PM

-OHGODMYRETINAS

I... god damnit, you have scarred me...

.::Taboo::. · September 19, 2011, 11:20:22 PM

hey i should give yall the measly first 15 pages of my third novel that i have sitting around somewhere hold on

Skorpion · September 20, 2011, 05:55:12 PM

Quote from: .::Taboo::. on September 19, 2011, 11:20:22 PM

hey i should give yall the measly first 15 pages of my third novel that i have sitting around somewhere hold on

A hardcore child researcho.
amirite?

Stocking · September 21, 2011, 06:02:38 PM

Quote from: Skorpion on September 20, 2011, 05:55:12 PM

A hardcore child researcho.
amirite?

sounds like taboo

Skorpion · September 21, 2011, 06:18:05 PM

I read it again.
I almost threw up.