Well, the voicing started quiet, went loud, then went really quiet. You might want to try to normalize the sound.
As for the content, it seemed okay. As a viewer I didn't really enjoy watching the load sequence (unless you were stressing a slow or fast load its probably best to not force us to sit through it hehe) and I started to lose interest when it ended up being just a first person video of you with small talk in the background between you and a friend, was it?
I've never really liked Sirherg's server videos (IMO they are just boring) but LTYTC has less substance than his due to the lack of clear, meaningful narration. The purpose of the video in the end hangs by a thread.
To improve, I'd suggest trying to do a cleaner faster editing job and perhaps spare us from the idle chatter in what should be a key part of the video for commentary.
