ITS MY FIRST VIDEO
If it's your first video you should take time to improvise, exercise and ask for opinions from friends. Don't go ahead and slam it here and expect for all "WOWS" and "OMG SO NICE" kind of stuff.
There are multiple flaws in the video. Of course, bad FPS being the first ahead, followed by no sound and just the fact that you just threw random crap in there makes it all horrible.