Me and some friends are making music and I need the forums wonderful feedback

[RedGajin]

So me and my friends are doing a cover of Monster and we are stuck on two parts for the beginning. I'm singing both of them,  but they are both very different.

Some feedback would be nice on which is better:

Original song:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Ona42jz8w0k

Keep in mind these are just rough drafts and are just to give the general feel of what we want this part to be like.

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[Eussorus]

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[TheABELBOTO]

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[Eussorus]

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[RedGajin]

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[Big Brother]

sounds kind of constipated

[TheABELBOTO]

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[RedGajin]

sounds kind of constipated

rough draftssssssss