Author Topic: The New World,Chapter 1  (Read 1463 times)

The new world chapter 1:The city Of Blockland,Its just a Normal day In blockland the cars where Moveing birds singing But 1 thing happend 9 years later The future had came New cars New buildings new Type of tvs.''As i walked outside i Saw Something....Something that was New....I saw hovering cars, I couldnet Belive my eyes At that very Mommet. i felt Happy'' I Soon began to Walk up the the Car and Talk to the person And i said'' This is a very nice car you have here.'' As i said that the man felt happy and then he chatterd away On how he got his car.'' Well after that was over i walked to the nearest car store,I said to the car dealer''I would like to buy this Car right here''I pointed to the Black and Red car''The Man told me That this car was the best ones In the State.''I kinda was happy but untill i saw the price,I started counting the money that i had from the saveings that my mom gave me i had Just enough for that 1 car,I Soon then got the car Of my dreams.Chapter 2 comeing out soon.


Good story. look forward to chapter 2. Keep up the good work Bach.

again, another award winning novel


Stop telling me what my age is Im from another country so  i dontknow much U.S

Stop telling me what my age is Im from another country so  i dontknow much U.S
Well learn English if you're going to go on a english-speaking forum.


Stop telling me what my age is Im from another country so  i dontknow much U.S

then what school did you go to

Check his posts.
I'm almost absolutely sure that he's trolling or using a sibling's account.

Listen all i want to do is have yall rate my story And shut-up about me Ok?


This sucks, you need to refine your skill. There is no way in any dimension for this "story" to be good. Take some classes if you're 17 on creative writing and proper story telling. It's too short, it's all cliche there is no effort or incentive, you should just write your life story all about how your life got flip turned upside down and I'd like to make a minute just sit right there and I'll tell you how I became the fresh prince of Bel'air.

Well learn English if you're going to go on a english-speaking forum.
and going to be writing a novel in full english

Listen all i want to do is have yall rate my story And shut-up about me Ok?
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