Intro for my blockland films

[darkninja8799]

I'm making a show on blockland called "My Stupid Freinds" and here is my intro preview for it :-)... don't know if the link will pop up..
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iLL_XkAsbOY&feature=plcp

And watch my pivot films to :D!

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[Shazoo]

Is this a starting episode to a series or just an intro to all the episodes?

If it's a starting episode then I'd say it's a little short and quiet, add some sound effects throughout the video instead of only at the ending (e.g. footsteps, pressing buttons, etc.). Also, I think it needs more of a surprise, usually when you see something that says "Do not touch!" the viewer expects the person to touch it anyway just because it's so common to see things like that in videos.

If it's an intro to all the episodes then it's a bit too long, try cutting out the beginning where he's at the gas station, and then only show the "Do not touch" scene, and you may not need to change this scene if it's an intro to all episodes. Also I think it's still too quiet, but instead of adding sound effects like footsteps you could add some catchy theme music.

Lastly, try making your camera movement smoother, and not miss the person when you turn the camera towards him.

[darkninja8799]

Is this a starting episode to a series or just an intro to all the episodes?

If it's a starting episode then I'd say it's a little short and quiet, add some sound effects throughout the video instead of only at the ending (e.g. footsteps, pressing buttons, etc.). Also, I think it needs more of a surprise, usually when you see something that says "Do not touch!" the viewer expects the person to touch it anyway just because it's so common to see things like that in videos.

If it's an intro to all the episodes then it's a bit too long, try cutting out the beginning where he's at the gas station, and then only show the "Do not touch" scene, and you may not need to change this scene if it's an intro to all episodes. Also I think it's still too quiet, but instead of adding sound effects like footsteps you could add some catchy theme music.

Lastly, try making your camera movement smoother, and not miss the person when you turn the camera towards him.

Thanks for the advice, and it was just a intro preview

[Teneksi]

Every scene seems totally disconnected.

>Guy goes to the BL Petrol store

>Neotek sign

>Guy stares at it

>It is suddenly "Don't touch" sign that blows up the city

I don't suppose you had any plan going into this.
It's not completely horrific for being one of your very first videos, but you could definitely use practice.

[darkninja8799]

Yes true, but I truely didn't have mutch of a plan, it's meant to be funny and random, and it's my 3rd video

[Alkatjo]

Don't count explosions if the frame rate is below 15...
Anyway, add more detail and a back story. Otherwise its pointless.

[Lamebro1]

"Plastic" derp.

Oh god that was hilarious.