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[Nonnel]

I think you went a bit off topic with Cronkite.

[Ad Bot]

[AdinX]

I think you went a bit off topic with Cronkite.

I kinda did, I'm working on bringing it back in, but I really like Cronkite.. I don't necessarily look up to him, but he is an idol of sorts for me.

[The Brighter Dark]

You're one of THOSE guys... cigarette... Just skip class.

Oh sorry, i didn't know getting an education was bad

[AdinX]

Oh sorry, i didn't know getting an education was bad

inb4youroneofTHOSEguys
inb4cigarette
inb4justskipclass

He was kidding Darky
or was he

[Katadeus]

Yeah last paragraph not related to topic at hand at all

[AdinX]

updated OP, I really wanna relate it to Walter

Should I just remove everything from the birthday, down?

[Nonnel]

updated OP, I really wanna relate it to Walter

Should I just remove everything from the birthday, down?

No, just take off where you started getting in depth about Cronkite.

[EazyE]

you must be good at math

[AdinX]

you must be good at math

uhh

No, just take off where you started getting in depth about Cronkite.

I started retyping it after I mentioned the origin of my name :/ idk if I can actually relate it to Cronkite, and after reading what kat said, it really was kinda true. Oh well lol. I'll have both versions in the OP, Cronkite and non-Cronkite, so we can see which is better.

[AdinX]

Updated the OP with a V2, so far I'm sort of liking this version more, sort of direct. I'll see how well I can write this one.

edit: I can't tell if the 8 one start people are giving me one star because of my writing, me, or just because of the subject.

[Flamecannon]

how the hell are you going to write 2 pages explaining your name

triple spacing

[AdinX]

triple spacing

double spacing, 12 size font, Calibri
:I

[Elecro]

My essay:

I was born on August 8th and my name is John.

pls give me A+++++++++++

rate 10/10

[AdinX]

OP, Essay V2 has been updated, critiquing would greatly be appreciated!

[Flamecannon]

you did use a lot of "I's"

not sure if that's a problem, but

I remember when I was five-years old, I met one of my uncles for the very first time; smart, funny, really nice but he would always tickle me and what-not. I remember one day when he and his family were staying over, he asked me what my name was, and in my shy little five-year old voice, I responded “I think it’s Steven…?” He proceeded to question me further, asking how I couldn’t be sure. I was really confused by this point, and I was at a complete lack of what to say.

is this considered too informal?