I Need Some Constructive Criticism

[BluetoothBoy]

Hello all. As many of you already may be aware of, I like to make music under the moniker LLOiD. Not too terribly long ago, I posted a song on this board that got some pretty meh reviews. As a result, I have since updated the song, and am reposting to see if y'all enjoy any more: http://www.audiotool.com/track/ariftmatic/

Please understand that (a. I'm still in my teens, and only getting started with making music (as in, I haven't been doing so for years now); (b. This is just a hobby for me. All my work is never meant to be taken with utmost seriousness; it's only for fun. Of course, it only being a hobby and all, it also means all my music is, or will be, free for download. :D

Thanks to whomever decides to journey down this musical road with me! Your support is greatly appreciated!

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[Night Fox]

the first 45 seconds of it is terribly repetitive
and it's even worse, because that same repetitive sound continues throughout the whole song
so try working on that, and also making better melodies

[BluetoothBoy]

Yeah, I was kinda thinking that myself. I actually have made other songs with much better melodies, but this one kinda stank. Also, once I had all the "bad" notes down, I found it really hard to fix it. It's like you get it stuck in your head, and then you come to think that's how it should sound, even if it sounds terrible.

Oh well. Not everything I make can be a success. I guess it's back to the drawing board. ;D

Oh, I would like to say, though (not sure if anyone will agree with me), that I really enjoyed this beat.

[Katadeus]

Repetitive, dissonant, bland

[BluetoothBoy]

Well, so much for constructive. People, I'm posting this here because I already know it's bad, and I want tips for improvement. So please, don't just tell me it's blah; give me something to work with!

[Yndaaa~]

Make it less

Repetitive, dissonant, bland

?

[Kniaz]

It doesn't really go anywhere, and there's a lack of dynamic to it...
Perhaps plan it out a bit more beforehand?

[ShadowsfeaR]

Repetitive, dissonant, bland

I love dissonance :>

[BluetoothBoy]

Yeah, Kniaz, I see what you're getting at, and I probably would take the time to do that if I was doing this professionally; however since it's only a hobby, I just like to go based on what feels right at the moment. Unfortunately, I got off to a bad start with this one... I'll probably just scratch it (might keep the beat), and start over. Just for comparison's sake, here's the other song I've made on audiotool: http://audiotool.com/track/so_far-n8bhwt/

I know it's not great, but it's proof that I'm not a total failure when it comes to music (I hope)...

[Night Fox]

http://audiotool.com/track/so_far-n8bhwt/

I'm only like a quarter through but so far (my apologies for the pun) it's better

oh wow
a sound starts at 1:27 and it's uh
not good, to put it nicely

[BluetoothBoy]

oh wow
a sound starts at 1:27 and it's uh
not good, to put it nicely

Hmmm...

Well, that one synth, IMO, is more personal preference than anything. The reason I kept it like that was because, as soon as I heard it, I thought of ships, so I kept it (weird reason, I know). But, in case you're wondering, it is supposed to have a brassy/light synth/slightly out-of-tune feel to it. Believe it or not, I didn't like it much at first either, but it grew on me (maybe because I stopped trying to single it out in the song, and rather listen to it as a single entity).

But yes, I'm still learning how use/configure synthesizers, so you may hear a suckish one here or there.

[Katadeus]

I love dissonance :>

that's unfortunate

Well, so much for constructive. People, I'm posting this here because I already know it's bad, and I want tips for improvement. So please, don't just tell me it's blah; give me something to work with!

I gave you plenty to work with
those are things that you need to change in order for it to be decent

[ShadowsfeaR]

Actually listening to it, it sounds really loving cool. Just diversify it a little, make it less repetitive. Anyone who says dissonance is bad needs to learn2music.

that's unfortunate

Come at me bro

I dare you

Cmon

[Dreams_Of_Cheese]

I actually really liked it. I wouldn't go out of my way to download it, but it makes good background music.

[BluetoothBoy]

Thanks, guys. I guess, when I comes down to it, some will love it, some will hate it, and others will just meh all over it.

@Katadues: I didn't mean that it wasn't true what you were saying; you just didn't state them in a constructive or helpful way. That's all. :)