just finished my first instrumental song, need blfs opinion

[Mura]

https://soundcloud.com/ocbmuramasa/pray-4-my-boys

Please tell me how i Did and what i did right or wrong thank you, this is very important to me

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[xSetrox]

a lot of the parts aren't perfectly looped- i can hear the loop ending and beginning
nice job though
it's creepy :o

[mod-man]

i rly rly like this, wonderful job :)

[Brickitect]

Nice job, but it scared me.

[EazyE]

makes me laugh lol, loop transition is okay, cant hear it unless youre looking for it for the most part

[Subpixel]

inb4arg

[Aide33]

really repetitive if you ask me

[Mura]

thanks for the feed-back

[childofdarkness016]

What program did you use to make this? Also, it doesn't sound too instrumental, especially because it has vocals in it, but hey, it's your creative work.

I like it.

[Niff]

sounds nice actually

[SeventhSandwich]

Sounds really really bad. Not trying to hurt your feelings, just being honest. The song is just creepy monk hymn noises + drum beat and church bells.

[childofdarkness016]

The song is just creepy monk hymn noises + drum beat and church bells.

is that a bad thing though

[SeventhSandwich]

is that a bad thing though

On a subjective level, no, but throwing together a bunch of sound effects doesn't follow the conventional rules of music composition.

See:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Counterpoint
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Harmonization

[childofdarkness016]

On a subjective level, no, but throwing together a bunch of sound effects doesn't follow the conventional rules of music composition.

See:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Counterpoint
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Harmonization

I don't think those were sound effects. I'm pretty sure those loops were made by Mura using a software instrument. The reason that matters is because that means he tried to make something that made musical sense. Either way, I believe it's music.

[SeventhSandwich]

The reason that matters is because that means he tried to make something that made musical sense. Either way, I believe it's music.

But it doesn't make musical sense. Like, there's no organization or structure evident in this. Even some of the most avant-garde pieces have some form of organization or subject.

I'm not gonna argue it's not music because that's not a battle I'm gonna win, but it's not good music.