i personally like it, its a good start to lyricism.but next time write your own lyrics for it, cause i do a similar idea (as in i take the rhythm of a song and use my own words), but i dont take the same lyrics and just replace a few words.so next time start from scratch and only involve some of the same words.
The Game
Short and simple. You posted it here for feedback. Don't cry because someone has some criticism. You can make it personal all you want. I flamed the "song" not you as a person.
I hardly left. Also, someone has issued a challenge.
I just got board
It's from the game portal look up "portal still alive" on you-tube.
That was actually the point to ruin a perfectly good song
Keep telling yourself that.
