Author Topic: Adventures of bob the old man (Read 8386 times)

Sirrus · February 19, 2009, 09:37:41 PM

Quote from: Young Link on February 19, 2009, 09:34:56 PM

Comedy isn't your thing, sorry.

Valen seems to like it.

Can I get some constructive criticism, besides, well, make it funny?

I ask basically because I want to know if these are;

A) Another excuse for you to berate me
B) Visibly funny, but not to you.
C) Legitimately bad.

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black knight · February 20, 2009, 12:14:27 AM

I like it.

Antallion · February 20, 2009, 02:43:04 AM

The text disappears into the side of the bubbles making it look badly done.
[/passive aggressive]

Sirrus · February 20, 2009, 06:56:47 AM

I had a talk with a friend of mine and he gave me a few production/writing tips. I'm hoping the next one will be a lil' better.

Sirrus · February 20, 2009, 08:03:31 PM

EvilMuffinZ · February 20, 2009, 08:32:21 PM

BOB THE BUILDER. CAN WE FIX IT? YES WE CAN!

Khorde · February 20, 2009, 09:10:53 PM

You're getting better. I lol'd at the Denise Austin and him having to piss all the time.

n0cturni · February 20, 2009, 09:15:57 PM

Quote from: Sirrus on February 19, 2009, 09:37:41 PM

Can I get some constructive criticism, besides, well, make it funny?

Less text in bubbles. Your comic is suffering from the ctrl+alt+del syndrome.

Antallion · February 21, 2009, 12:06:03 AM

@second last frame:

FABULOUS!

MackTheHunter · February 21, 2009, 12:29:43 AM

Your poses really are terrible.

black knight · February 21, 2009, 02:14:24 AM

I like it.

Monty · February 21, 2009, 04:05:28 AM

Quote from: Hunter on February 21, 2009, 12:29:43 AM

Your poses really are terrible.

I actually quite like the crude poses.

Netwars4 · February 21, 2009, 04:10:40 AM

Quote from: Hunter on February 21, 2009, 12:29:43 AM

Your poses really are terrible.

it distracts from his attempts at humor, and being coupled with the text not really fitting in with the rest of it, the humor is just completely hidden.

Sirrus · February 23, 2009, 10:19:35 PM

I hope to write more of these, just haven't found the time.

Nyskel · February 23, 2009, 10:56:29 PM

What was the old man doing while the Denise Austin part?
Humping himself?