Author Topic: "The Terror of Earth" a story Im writing when Im bored  (Read 1200 times)

The Terror of Earth
a Slugger mini book


     "ACK! Look out!" Yelled Mik, "The WEE are coming!". "In the bomb shelters! NOW!" Yelled Walter
In the distance, Mik and Walter are cringing in fear as people are screaming and explosions are going off, and the bombers and fighters, engines roaring up above. Hearing paratroopers and other supplies dropping off in the distance, Walter and Mik decide to hurry and get everyone into the secret hallway.
     "Everyone stay quiet, the WEE are inspecting all bomb shelters." whispered Walter. After hours of inspection, they hear no one around, and as others began to call, they heard that the coast was clear. As soon as everyone was out, there were weeping men and woman, with children by side or in arms, everyone weeping.
     The bombing of the island of Oahu was devestating, espically to the town of Crips. Walter and Mik, visiting their families have no one left in their families anymore, wives, children, or any parents, or aunts and uncles, after the bombing of Oahu. They dedicate their lives to fighting in the small, but powerful WWR.
      The WWR, is made up of only 10 countries, Greece, Spain, United States, Canada, France, United Kingdom, Italy, Germany, Turkey, and Sweden. Many years have passed since the World Wide Rebels and the World Empire Elites, have been in a full armed conflict. As the WWR have been winning battles, they are outnumbered 100-1, have managed to stay in the conflict, after 100 years. Walter and Mik, born in 2096, have been in the conflict since 2117, the year is now 2121.
       The WWR Council have sent Walter and Mik to Italy, in an underground base of Sicily. They will discuss their tactics there, while getting some extra training.


To be continued....

Wow that sucked. You repeated yourself a lot and had a few run-ons.

Eh I suck at writing.

Eh I suck at writing.
Then don't write. That, or learn to write better.

Took a few rereads for me to understand everything.

Totally unrelated to you, but I entered a writing competition once and won.

Key: GOOD GRAMMAR AND SPELLING. Learn them both please and i will give you co- hugs.

Totally unrelated to you, but I entered a writing competition once and won.

Key: GOOD GRAMMAR AND SPELLING. Learn them both please and I will give you co- hugs.

:(


Cool idea, not so cool writing. 100-1 outnumbered is just unrealistic. And some of the lines were just stupid/unnecessary

I have an idea for a BOOK. Except my L.A. teacher has never been remotely pleased with my writing skills, so I dare not think of it.

Read all of the best books you can, or litrature.


Get the book War and Peace.

Read all of the best books you can, or litrature.


Get the book War and Peace.
Dude, War and Peace was awesome! Other literary greats The tell-tale heart by Edgar Allan Poe. Good variety even if a bit morbid.