OH MY GOD THIS IS SO AMAZING AND FUNNY!!!! OMFG!!!!
Here's what I really think.
You need to learn how to use flash before you make something like this. The buttons to start the video in the beginning don't work like they should. And the whole thing goes very fast (might have been what you were going for but some parts are so fast that you can't tell what's going on). The credits went by to fast to read and they were very sloppy.
The "style" is fine, but it was poorly executed. You can keep your animation funny with your exaggerated style but touch it up a bit. You really need more experience with your tablet, start doodling every day in flash and I'm sure you'll improve by some level. Maybe some more background would be good, I'm not sure.
The voices are good and pretty funny, keep doing what you're doing with those. Just make sure they aren't mumbley and that everyone can understand them.
I did laugh a few times if i recall (if not out loud then in my head)
I hope this gives you some things to think about for the second one.
Good luck.
I thank you for not being a toal ass and giving me a serious comment.
Here's a few things that you pointed out that I failed to do.
- I didn't make the buttons pop up, blink or squish because I didn't know how.
- I had no idea how to make a preloader until recently.
- This animation was done entirely before I got my tablet with my mouse
- I was a dumbass and used the pencil tool at 6.25 thickness.
- You cannot color inside the pencil tool.
- I only had 3 layers. Very poor choice on my part, yes.
- Credits were too fast, I don't know why I didn't put more frames.
- The easter egg was handicapped.
I'm planning on working on putting more layers, adding color, a preloader, and more user friendly buttons. I'll try to interpret some jokes slower, so I can get my points across.
Thank you, sir.