"My current events project...2012" -not an actual report.

[shafin25]

Any Constructive criticism to make my writing better anyone?

Nice hook, nice beginning. Only thing is check your spelling.

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[Cucumber!]

Thanks. Will improve on my spelling.

[gun fun]

Any Constructive criticism to make my writing better anyone?

A.R.C already said it

[.::Taboo::.]

Don't use massive letter??

[A.R.C.]

The guy is seeing stuff. He need medication or to be in a mental hospital.

[Cucumber!]

The guy is seeing stuff. He need medication or to be in a mental hospital.

Well the doctor will probably give him some kind of medication.

[vv45689]

Here's a little short bit of writing I suddenly kinda made up :P
Hope you like it!
My current events project…2012


I sniffed my OJ Simpson bitch. She smiled, “look, there’s nothing to worry about, trust me…” I stared into her eyes; I knew she was telling the truth. “Okay,” I managed a smile. “But can I still believe in Maria the horse princess?” Sylvia laughed, “of course you can…”

all i thought about


9/10 great story

[Cucumber!]

9/10 great story

Thanks!

[Xoax]

It kind of annoys me when stories have random tangents that are un-needed and currently don't make too much sense to the story, what was that whole "Here come the hallucinations" thing about? And then the whole anime calender thing both confused and enraged me.

Overall good writing though, descriptive and such.

[Cucumber!]

Thanks! I feel prompted to be a writer now.

[Whatisthis]

Fuuuu! The date is December 21st! Nice job getting it right D:<

[Tech-Troop]

If you really believe the whole 2012 thing than don't, NASA has debunked all of the theries. So you can stop freaking out, but if it's holisinating and stuff you need a doctor than.

[lol of doom]

thats cool