New Story: The Voices

[Dapizzanator]

The story sounds a lot like Edgar Allan Poe's "The Telltale Heart."
Can't wait to read the hard copy, though.

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[WhatevaGuy]

The story sounds a lot like Edgar Allan Poe's "The Telltale Heart."
Can't wait to read the hard copy, though.

:D
And that was a great story by the way.  Pretty much all of Poe's works are.

[JJA0]

It reminds me of the scary stories topic when someone posted
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The Voice

If you ever are in an area of absolute quiet, still your breathing and move not a muscle. After a few seconds, you will notice that the silence has a sort of "sound" of its own, a kind of empty ringing tone. This is nothing unique; everyone will hear this, given the proper setting. An informed person will tell you that your brain is trying to interpret the lack of stimuli to your hearing and so creates a bit of a filler sound. This ringing sound actually serves a more arcane purpose, covering up a noise we are not meant to hear. This noise is not impossible to hear, and if you are persistent you can effectively "break" the cover-up sound.

The next time you are silent and hear the ringing, shout at the top of your lungs for about half a minute, then be abruptly silent. It will be different for everyone. Some will hear nothing different for dozens of tries. Others might pick up soft murmuring. A special few auditory heroes might clearly make it out on the first attempt. What you will hear is a voice that relays an account of events about to happen in the immediate future. It's like a sportscaster relaying the events occurring 10 seconds into the future.

As time goes on, you will be able to make out this voice under increasingly noisy circumstances, to the point that it can be heard at any time by just concentrating. Such ability would doubtlessly be invaluable, no? You will be able react to any immediate danger, relate to people around you with greater ease. No one would ever surprise you. Now, of course you are wondering what sort of horrible catch this ability entails. Perhaps the tone of the voice is so horrible that it will drive you mad, or maybe the voice will only predict your death over and over again.

Of course this isn't the case, though, it’s a normal voice, your ears receive it no matter what, and it’s simply a matter of noticing. But there is a danger. For you see, where there is a voice, there is a body. And just like you will notice new sounds, so shall you notice new sights. More importantly, you will be noticed.

but the story is good nonetheless

[WhatevaGuy]

It reminds me of the scary stories topic when someone posted
. but the story is good nonetheless

Hey!  You found my inspiration!
You get a hug and some chocolate.

[Dapizzanator]

Is that supposed to be scary...? Pizza no getty.

[WhatevaGuy]

Is that supposed to be scary...? Pizza no getty.

Where there is a voice, there is a body.
You hear voices, therefore there is a person somewhere near you.
It's saying that when you break the mask, you hear voices that aren't truly disembodied, and will see new things like people.
That's my interpretation.

[HellHound]

Where there is a voice, there is a body.
You hear voices, therefore there is a person somewhere near you.
It's saying that when you break the mask, you hear voices that aren't truly disembodied, and will see new things like people.
That's my interpretation.

When I read that story, I wanted to read moar, and WHAT THE forget DO YOU SEE?

[Sirrus]

It's very meh. Doesn't seem to have much of a point at this stage, not much interesting stuff in there either. Very short; that's the biggest issue.

[Lalam24]

...not like the ones you'd expect to hear...

Everyone has their own perception of a voice, or voices.  You're being very bleak by stating this.

Otherwise, the story's descriptive properties are fantastic.  However, what the plot revolves around (hearing voices) is too commonly represented within horror-based stories, and, with that, the unique factor is shot down.  Now, if this isn't going to be a horror story, then I stand corrected.

[WhatevaGuy]

It's very meh. Doesn't seem to have much of a point at this stage, not much interesting stuff in there either. Very short; that's the biggest issue.

It's not like it's done.
If you thought it was.

Everyone has their own perception of a voice, or voices.  You're being very bleak by stating this.

Otherwise, the story's descriptive properties are fantastic.  However, what the plot revolves around (hearing voices) is too commonly represented within horror-based stories, and, with that, the unique factor is shot down.  Now, if this isn't going to be a horror story, then I stand corrected.

I can change that line, I suppose.
And it is going to be a horror story.  But uniquity (shut up it's a word) isn't really important to me (hell, I'm writing a zombie story), as long as the story itself turns out good.

I know, that's probably a bad thing, but hey--I've made some pretty creative stuff before.  I just really liked the idea of it.

[JJA0]

(hell, I'm writing a zombie story)

Ive never heard of a zombie that talks and is only visible to a few people.

[Sirrus]

It's not like it's done.
If you thought it was.

I dunno. I knew it wasn't done, but it felt more like a plot synopsis and not so much like the beginning of a story.

[WhatevaGuy]

I dunno. I knew it wasn't done, but it felt more like a plot synopsis and not so much like the beginning of a story.

'Twas a prologue.
I'm technically going to go back in time, in a sense, and start from the beginning.  You know, like a normal first-person narrative.

So instead of me telling it like that, I'll actually do something like a normal book.
Pizza, I may make you one of my editors (on the hard copy) so you may not want to read the updates.
You can if you want, I just wanted to warn you that I was going to keep putting more on.