Author Topic: I am pretty disturbed at my own imagination  (Read 2260 times)

According to the SCP foundation rules, this has too many cliches

Good story though.

So you weren't able to finish your sentence, but you could still hit post?


neah
Do it for me if you really want it uploaded, but be sure to give mecredit

So you weren't able to finish your sentence, but you could still hit post?
Maybe he accidentally posted it as he died.

So you weren't able to finish your sentence, but you could still hit post?
Really.
You come here just to point out holes in the story that have been in countless other stories, and nobody complained about them.

I have a problem with doing that...

Wow I think I've read this story thousands of times in crappy books and on creepypasta. Don't feel disturbed; you're perfectly average.

Wow I think I've read this story thousands of times in crappy books and on creepypasta. Don't feel disturbed; you're perfectly average.
wait
How could you have read this thousands of times already

My brother is actually really scared by this
loel
I honestly was a little surprised that you could manage to come up with this.

It's not what I expected when you made it sound like your story was DUMB, the first time you told me about this.

wait
How could you have read this thousands of times already

Normal thing becomes scary thing, scary thing chases protagonist, protagonist hides in house, scary thing kills protagonist.

This is actually a regularly used formula.

The imagination thing makes it even more silly, because if the protagonist acknowledges it's not real, then the only thing that kills him is himself. Which then makes this Self Delete. Which then just makes this a messed up Self Delete note. Which is another trite formula.


wait
How could you have read this thousands of times already

Unoriginal. I didn't mean those exact words, hurr.


What your need is a bit more plot and a bit more imagery.

:,(

Sorry if I was rude but it's a tried and untrue formula you wrote with, especially ending mid-word as you or the main character is taken away. Original stories and even short stories are very hard to come up with though, especially in this day and age where everyone is a "writer". You need to take the skeleton of your story and put a unique spin on it, trite as that sounds.

I wasnt actually writing to become popular, it was an assignment
but man the look on everyones faces