Author Topic: Near Death - A book I'm writing. (UPDATE AGAIN AGAIN AGAIN AGAIN)  (Read 10752 times)

I ran until I couldn't stand the fatigue any longer.

To,


I climbed the tree.


Help me make sense of this. Please.

um dude, theres a dragon over there.. get out.. get out oF THE loving CARRRR DRRAAAGIGIIIN fusrodah!!!! AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

You stole this from Indy.

comedy can't accept that he doesn't have the proper education to actually write anything interesting. he also can't deal with criticism and reacts to it by shoving his head up his ass like a loveually curious ostrich. instead of improving his work he goes to great lengths to defend it, wasting more time and energy making up excuses than he would have used improving his ideas. comedy was an idiot when he first joined the forums, he's adapted to our attitude, but he is still an idiot. we've seen this kind of stuff before, a kid writes a 4 paragraph segment with no hook and no initial plot, claims he's going to write a book, gets pissed when people try to make his work better, and then gives up on the whole idea because it's too much work. the difference between comedy and those kids that came before him is that comedy pretends like he's some kind of literary genius.

the difference between comedy and those kids that came before him is that comedy pretends like he's some kind of literary genius.
Not really.

Not really.
The kids before him thought they were good, but didn't pretend they were steven king. Comedy is acting like he just wrote the Da Vinci code and we're all illiterate morons, mostly answering to criticism with a stuffty response like "hahahaha" or "your not so good at writing iether."

comedy can't accept that he doesn't have the proper education to actually write anything interesting. he also can't deal with criticism and reacts to it by shoving his head up his ass like a loveually curious ostrich. instead of improving his work he goes to great lengths to defend it, wasting more time and energy making up excuses than he would have used improving his ideas. comedy was an idiot when he first joined the forums, he's adapted to our attitude, but he is still an idiot. we've seen this kind of stuff before, a kid writes a 4 paragraph segment with no hook and no initial plot, claims he's going to write a book, gets pissed when people try to make his work better, and then gives up on the whole idea because it's too much work. the difference between comedy and those kids that came before him is that comedy pretends like he's some kind of literary genius.
as much as i agree, he's only 11.

The kids before him thought they were good, but didn't pretend they were steven king. Comedy is acting like he just wrote the Da Vinci code and we're all illiterate morons, mostly answering to criticism with a stuffty response like "hahahaha" or "your not so good at writing iether."
Could you link me to examples? Honestly all the kids I know who think they've written stories come off like they're literary geniuses.

I didn't steal it, the original storyline was mine, so I had the right to take it and use it.  I will be sure to give credit to all editors.
Noedit: Fricking double toast.

So you have a storyline. And if someone else has a similar storyline, you can just take their's and claim it as yours because you came up with the idea?

You're a loving idiot. I cannot describe how flawed you are, and how much of an ignorant little brat you are. Like I said, if you really want to write - wait until you have a better understanding of writing, larger vocabulary etc. This is ridiculous.

To all the richardheads above:

I wrote it with intentions of him using it





derp

It's still pretty awful logic.

Could you link me to examples? Honestly all the kids I know who think they've written stories come off like they're literary geniuses.
i think the last time we had a kid write some stuff was early 2011, he wasn't a richard about it though.

"All of a sudden, the ground shook and the air split as a shockwave hit my sister and me. We were thrown back off our feet and our senses were thrown into a fog. Debris fell all around us as we snapped out of our stupor. I could see the fear in my sister's face. My instincts kicked in as I helped her up on unsteady legs and we ran for a bridge. The security of the bridge enveloped us and relief swept over us. But it was short lived. Terror once again clasped its cold hand around us as the concrete walls began to collapse."
This is sort of sudden, but it's really noticeable.

Between, "Helped her up on unsteady legs and we ran for a bridge" and "The security of the bridge enveloped us and relief swept over us" sort of skips a necessary sentence that explains actually reaching the bridge.

It feels, when I read it, like the two characters instantly teleported onto the bridge.

So you have a storyline. And if someone else has a similar storyline, you can just take their's and claim it as yours because you came up with the idea?
I wrote it with intentions of him using it

Ouch

comedy can't accept that he doesn't have the proper education to actually write anything interesting. he also can't deal with criticism and reacts to it by shoving his head up his ass like a loveually curious ostrich. instead of improving his work he goes to great lengths to defend it, wasting more time and energy making up excuses than he would have used improving his ideas. comedy was an idiot when he first joined the forums, he's adapted to our attitude, but he is still an idiot. we've seen this kind of stuff before, a kid writes a 4 paragraph segment with no hook and no initial plot, claims he's going to write a book, gets pissed when people try to make his work better, and then gives up on the whole idea because it's too much work. the difference between comedy and those kids that came before him is that comedy pretends like he's some kind of literary genius.
i also want to take this moment to say he seems to think really highly of himself
i can't explain it
you can just
feel it
and that
that makes me ANGRY  :nes: